These are two prompt poems from Simply Snickers.
as we sit here
amid the rendition
and the tears.
that some day
under some dark sky
under some dark umbrella
in someone else’s arms,
that you will love again.
Her face was white,
eyes opaque and
With her mouth half closed she looked
She might as well have been
lying under a lake.
But this puddle had served its purpose,
gently loosing the life from her.
He tilted his umbrella back one last time
scuttling away amid the pools of lamplight.
Never break a promise.
oh boy… both of them are excellent… that first one tho’ whew… that one gets ya…..
The first one is piercing.
Love this line in the second poem: “She might as well have been lying under a lake.” Who has not been there?
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These may be two separate poems but they flow very well together. Both are very nicely written.
the first one is sad, yet leaves room for hope; the 2nd one, while sad, paints a picture of a not-uncommon-reality AND, i must say, it paints a LOVELY picture of this stark reality! i absolutely LOVE the metaphors here. just brilliant all the way around!
Glad to Linda. Seems to have got my creative juices flowing a bit more. Good thing.
Thanks Ofira. I try! 🙂
Cheers Jan, for the kind words.