Way up in the night.

There was a perfect crescent moon.
And it lay beside a single star
Way up in the night.
They discussed the wind.
The comings and goings of it and how
it rustled your hair
as you twirled in your new dress.

All the lamps were golden and strung out
to my half closed eyes,
each eye lash diffracting your beauty.
Everything was fluid and full and tangible
each seperate taste on my tongue.

And when you’d finished dancing
we went inside to not turn on the lights.

14 comments

  1. krkbaker · May 23, 2007

    This brings back some memories for me. I really like the sweetness/seductiveness of it.

    Playing round robin over at nextgr8t, don’t know if you do fiction or not but feel free to jump in if you want. kim

  2. Sarah · May 26, 2007

    so yeh it’s me birthday… celebraaate!

  3. zaphodfreek · May 26, 2007

    kim – I’ll drop in if I have time but have MASSIVE exams in about a week so free time is to a minimum.

    Sarah – I know! I sent you a letter. Haven’t you got it yet? Stupid postal service…….appart from my post man. He’s amazing. :] I have zilch phone credit and internet is HIGHLY restricted here. I’m suprised I’m even allowed on here. So I shall get in contact wih you as soon as possible.

  4. Sarah · May 30, 2007

    aye okay. i wish you the best on leaving certs. cheeeers!

  5. zaphodfreek · June 2, 2007

    Thanks Sarah!

  6. tomachfive · June 3, 2007

    Thoughts like these remind of how being with someone can as pure and bright as the celestial bodies. Two humans who connect spiritually are a constellation more scintillating than the lights we see. Inspiring.

  7. zaphodfreek · June 3, 2007

    Glad you liked Tom.

  8. theair · June 3, 2007

    This reads a lot like a Simic poem. If you’re not familiar with him yet, I highly recommend him.

    This piece is so serene and almost cryptic… mind-jarring, really, and very enjoyable.

  9. zaphodfreek · June 3, 2007

    Thanks.
    I shall look him up.
    🙂

  10. K.M.Ryan · June 8, 2007

    Nice, simple imagery and personification, but you’ve also mastered its use to create the effectiveness and power that this poem eminates. good job.

  11. vesper · June 8, 2007

    the last two lines break my heart. lovely darlin’.

  12. zaphodfreek · June 9, 2007

    Thanks K.
    Encouragement is always appreciated.

    And thank you too vesper.
    Happy to see a comment from you.

  13. kim · June 22, 2007

    Hey, where are you?

  14. zaphodfreek · June 22, 2007

    I’m here.

    Infact I shall once again be here as exams are OVER!!!!!
    I think I shall put up a post to that effect.

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